20172017郑州英语初一作文范文

20172017郑州英语初一作文范文篇一

河南省郑州市中原区2015届高三英语圈题17--作文：应用文

圈题作文：应用文

例题分析

假如你叫李华，在郑州一中读书，在高中学习英语的过程中遇到一些问题，想得到老师的帮助，请班级的英语老师提一些建议，以帮助自己学好英语。下面表格中只给了简单的提示，请你结合自己的实际情况给英语老师写一封求助信，内容如下：

Dear teacher,

My name is Li Hua. I’m writing a letter to you to ask for some help.

Yours,

Li Hua

解析:这篇书面表达从要求来看是一封求助信，属于应用文。它的特点是：给出了大致的写作方向，但需要考生结合自己的情况补充内容。这就需要考生组织好自己的语言，在脑海里先想出一篇汉语的短文，然后用英语写出来。下面是一篇范文供大家参考。 Dear teacher,

My name is Li Hua. I’m writing a letter to you to ask for some help. I have met many very difficult to learn.

to us some good ways to learn new words we can remember them more easily？advise you to teach the text more slowly so that the average students can easily ’m Yours.

Li Hua

(全国I)

假定你是李华，希望通过外籍教师Peter找一个英语笔友。请写一封短信，描述一下你理想中笔友的条件，并说明为什么选这样的笔友。具体条件包括：

1.年龄；

2.性别；

3.爱好（旅游、运动、宠物等）。

注意： 1．词数100 左右；

2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；

3．开头语已为你写好，不计入总数。

Dear Peter,

I am writing to ask whether you are able to do me a favor.

Best regards,

Li Hua

解析：这篇书面表达从要求来看是一封短信，也属于应用文。它的特点是：给出了要写的大致内容，但需要考生结合自己的情况写出具体内容。这就需要考生组织好自己的语言，在脑海里先想出一篇汉语的短文，然后用英语写出来。下面是一篇范文供大家参考。

Dear Peter,

I’m writing to ask whether you are able to do me a favor. mine. In my mind, she is someone swimming, and playing table tennis. Besides, it would be better for her to have a pet dog as I have kept one at home for some time. With such a pen friend, I think I can share with her our traveling experiences, taking care of pets, or whatever we have in common. And I believe I will improve my English by doing so and learn more about her country.

Best regards,

Li Hua

举一反三突破提升

1.（江西）

你所在的班级将要举办一次主题为“What Can We Do for Our School?”的英语演讲比赛。请写一篇英语演讲稿，要求从以下四方面中任选一至二个进行阐述，并举例加以说明。

1.关心他人；

2.美化校园；

3.受护学校设施；

4.营造良好的学习氛围。

注意：

1.不要在书面表达中出现所在学校的校名和本人姓名，否则本节判为零分；

2.词数：100左右；

3.参考词汇：爱心——love and care;校园——campus; 设施——facilities;

氛围——environment

4.开头和结尾已经写好，且不记入词数。

Hello, everyone. It’s nice to speak about what we can do for our school, and I think each of us can do something.

„„„„

Thank you for listening!

参考范文：

Hello, everyone. It’s nice to speak about what we can do for our school, and I think each of us can do something. putting the rubbish in the trashcan.

The second thing we can do is to protect the facilities in our school. When we leave the

classroom, we should never forget to turn off the lights or close the door. We should not leave the tap water running or waste any materials in the laboratory class.

If everyone does one thing for our school, I believe we will turn our school into a better place to Study and live in.

Thank you for listening!

2.书面表达

假定你是李华，将于今年七月从光明外语学校毕业。你从报纸上得知R公司要招聘一名英文秘书，你很感兴趣。请给该公司写一封求职信，包括下列要点：

1. 年龄：

2. 学习情况及英语水平：

3. 兴趣和特长：

4. 性格特点

注意：1. 词数100 左右；

2. 可适当增加细节， 以使行文连贯；

3. 开头和结束语已为你写好。

Dear Sir or Madam,

I learned from the newspaper that your company needs an English secretary._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

____________________________________________.

I’m looking forward to your reply.{20172017郑州英语初一作文范文}.

Sincerely yours

Li Hua

参考范文：

Dear Sir or Madam,

I learned from the newspaper that your company needs an English secretary. I’m really interested in this position and hope I can work for you.

I’m 18 years old and will be graduating from Guangming Foreign Language School this July. I’m an excellent student, of 50 students. I’m good at English, I enjoy music very much too. I like ’m easy to get along with and I like to make friends.

I’m looking forward to your reply.

Sincerely yours,

Li Hua

3.书面表达

你叫 Jackson ,你的一位朋友 Justin 在上星期的全国英语演讲比赛中失败了，请你写一封信向他表示安慰。内容要点如下：

1. 听说他未取得名次，你感到很惊讶；

2. 他曾经多次参加过全校性的各种英语演讲比赛，并且取得了好成绩；

3. 虽然这次英语演讲比赛他未能取得名次，但已经努力过了就无需后悔。

4. 勉励他不要灰心，加倍努力，下次一定能取得好的成绩。

注意：

1. 不要逐条翻译，可适当增加细节；

2. 词数要求100 左右。

3. 格式已经给出，只写正文。{20172017郑州英语初一作文范文}.

4. 参考词汇： 比赛 competition 成绩achievement

Dear Justin,

Yours truly

Jackson

参考范文:

Dear Justin,

What a great surprise to me when you failed in the National English Competition held last week ！, you have made great achievements in all kinds of hope you don't lose better achievements in next year's contest.

Yours truly Jackson

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河南省郑州市中原区2015届高三英语圈题18--作文：议论文

圈题作文：议论文

例题分析

(一)目前，学校存在少数学生考试作弊现象。请以My opinion on cheating in examination为题，

写一篇短文。 主要原因：1考试偏多，偏难。2不用功，懒惰。3取悦父母，老师

个人看法：1作弊不对，违反校规。2要诚实，努力学习

My opinion on cheating in examination

It is known to us all that some students cheat in examinations at school.

As students, we often take examinations at school, but sometimes we have too many

examinations which are too difficult for us. On the one hand, some of us are lazy and don’t work hard at their lessons. So when taking examinations, they sometimes cheat in order to get better results to please their parents and teachers.

In my opinion, it is wrong to cheat in examinations because it breaks the rules of schools. We students should be honest and try to get good results by studying hard instead of cheating in exams. What's more, we should improve our study methods and get well prepared for examinations.

(二)

作为一个中学生,你肯定经历过多次考试,体验过成功,也遭遇过失败.请你根据提示内容,简要概述中学生普遍存在的对考试失败的两种态度,并结合自身实际,说明你的观点. 态度一:当考试结果不尽人意时,情绪低落,丧失信心,不再继续努力.

态度二:当考试失败时,分析找出失败的原因,鼓励自己,增强自信,避免再犯同样的错。 你的观点:失败乃成功之母,„„

解析:这篇书面表达从要求来看是一篇议论文。它的特点是：列举出了要写的主要内容，要求写出自己的看法。这就需要把写作要点连贯起来写成短文。议论文常用句：Some people hold the opinion that„/Others, however, argue that„/

Firstly,.. Secondly,„In addition/What’s more„/In my opinion,

参考范文：

We middle school students have had many tests or exams and have both achieved success and suffered from failure, but different students take different attitudes to failure.

Some fall in low spirits when they don’t do well in the exams, losing heart and no longer

studying as hard as before. However, most students take an active attitude towards failure. By encouraging themselves to be self-confident, they find out and analyze the causes so that they will no longer make similar mistakes.

In my opinion, failure is the mother of success, which can teach us a lot in the process of reaching our goals, and only by tasting failure can we enjoy the fruit of success.

举一反三突破提升

1.说广告（about advertisement）.

提示：有人说广告在现代社会是很重要，有人认为广告的促销成分太多，你认为…… 参考范文：

About Advertisement{20172017郑州英语初一作文范文}.

Some people think advertisements play an important part in our daily life, while others hold the view against advertisements. In my opinion, advertising reflects the advancement of the society. It is true that some advertisements just try to persuade people to buy something, and some advertisements aren’t reliable. The quality of goods isn’t as good as it is claimed in the advertisement.

However, advertisements give much up-to-date information about products. Consumers can learn a lot about goods on the market through advertisements and advertising helps to sell a bigger market. As more goods are sold, they are cheaper and more people can afford them. Besides, advertisements provide money for newspapers, radio and TV stations, etc.

Therefore, in today’s world , advertising is not only necessary but also helpful. 2.“你认为家教中心怎么样”

参考范文：

What Do You Think of a Tutorial Centre

I think a tutorial centre is very useful.

Two years ago, my English was very poor and I enrolled in an English class at a tutorial centre. I have studied there for two years. Now my command of English has been improved considerably. When I first entered the tutorial centre, I could not say anything in English to anyone. But my British teacher encouraged me to speak English all the time. With her help, I could communicate in English with my teachers, classmates and even with a foreigner. 3. “怎样提高阅读理解能力”

参考范文： How to Improve Your Reading Comprehension

For a language learner, you must read a lot of things. Only when you can understand what others write in the language, can you really learn something from them. So it is essential to improve your reading comprehension.

The best way to become a good reader is through practice. You cannot read a few paragraphs just once in a while and become a fluent reader. You need to read constantly . It is advisable to carry something with you wherever you go. When you have time , take it out and read a paragraph or two. Once you have made reading a habit , your reading comprehension is bound to improve. To improve your reading comprehension, you also need to develop certain reading skills . For example , a poor reader will move his eyes from word to word . To pick up speed and fluency, you should learn to read the words in groups . Mastering such reading techniques is the key to effective reading.

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2014年郑州大学 文化 经济 全球化英语作文

Please write an article entitled My Views on Art Education according to the following Chinese outline: 1. 有人认为审美能力应从小培养，因此许多家长给孩子报名参加较为系统的艺术班学习；2.也有人认为中小学已开设了相关艺术课程，因此没有必要参加系统的专业艺术班学习；3.我认为……

My Views on Art Education

Art is an interesting and fascinating thing. We attach significance to the ability to appreciate artworks.

Some people suppose that we need develop art appreciation of our children when they are young, therefore, a lot of parents make their children sign in art class. However, others argue that primary schools have art class, so children need not join in professional art class.

In my opinion, art is from our daily life. We do not need art class and can make our children have interest in art by taking them to art exhibition and art museums or traveling with them. Art exhibition will lead our children to understand what art really is and traveling in many beautiful views will let them know where art comes from.

Please write a composition based on the following Chinese outline:1.有人说现在的孩子没有童年；2.分析这种现象背后的原因；3.你的观点

What Childhood Should People Have?

Recently, some people agree that our children do not have a wonderful childhood in modern society.

The reason why people have this thinking is that childhood can not be full of happiness and children do not have a dream to chase. Because of too much pressure, children need to do lots of homework and do not have enough time to be devoted in what they really interest in. In addition, the pace of our society becomes faster and faster, therefore, parents should be busy with their heavy work and have no time to accompany us.

In my opinion, children should develop some habits and parents had better support them. It is very benefited for children. Only in this way can our children have a meaningful childhood.

要求：

Please Write a composition entitled My Opinion on Strange Names about 150 words according to the Chinese outline.1.从中国传统来看，起名需要考虑哪些因素；

2.中国人口众多，重名现象很多。此外，奇怪的名字近年来屡见不鲜；3.如何看待上述现象。 Note: Before your writing, read the two passages of Unit 9.

My Opinion on Strange Names

Sometimes, we can hear many strange names. And we always find some people whose names are difficult to read. It is not convenient for us when we need to call these names.

In my opinion, a strange name maybe has a great influence on adults, because it will make them have more chances. But it is bad for a child.

So, I suggest that parents should consider if their children names easy to read and to remember. Although our parents expect that our names can give us good luck, sometimes it brings us trouble in fact.

When I give my child a name, I will be likely to give my child a normal name. Of course, I am sure that their names have a good influence on them

firstly .Secondly, I should know which names are popular, and we need to avoid using them. Then name will not be a problem. And our children will not be annoyed by his or her strange name.

要求：

Write a composition of at least 120 words entitled On the Development of New Technology based on the following Chinese outline: 1.科技发展给人们带来了很多便利；2.但科技的发展也同样给人们带来了很多负面的影响；3.我的观点

The Development of New Technology

These days, the speed of our country development has become more and more fast. In the result of the fact that people attach significance to new technology, our life style has changed a lot.

Most people believe that new technology can bring us convenience and improve the quality of life. However, too much bad influence can not be ignored. Because of pollution, our rivers have not been clear when our air has not been clean.

In my opinion, new technology makes our life easier while it has some shortcomings. Although our environment is being damaged, we have taken this problem seriously. In the aspect of new technology's shortcoming, I believe we will overcome it by other new technology.

要求：

Please write a composition of at least 120 words according to the outline given below in Chinese.

1.即将毕业的大学生们面临着未来道路的选择

2.我们在规划未来时需要考虑的主要因素

3.你的选择及原因

The Future Plan For Graduates

Many students worry about their future and do not have a clear plan to guide themselves. Because people believe if they graduate, they will have to find a job. As a result of competition, jobs are not easy to find. Therefore, they face the challenge and are forced to choose one road on which they are able to follow and chase their dream.

If we decide to make a plan for the future. Many things have to be

concerned. Firstly, realizing your value is of significance. In addition, you should know what you can do and what you are willing to do. Then, find a job that you are fitted with.

As for my future, I would like to be a doctor who fights with illness and save a lot of people from death. Apart from this reason, doctors are really welcome because of their patience and excellent technique. So, after graduation, doctor is what I most desire to become in the future.

题目：整天把自己埋在书本里是没有用的。要培养一些业余爱好，每隔一段时间参加一些体育锻炼或课外活动。劳逸结合才是健康的学习习惯。我以前看电视连续剧常常看到深夜，这太费时间，还影响我的健康和体形。为了避免诱惑，我把电视机搬出了我的屋子，开始从事别的休闲活动，比如读书、弹钢琴。

内容：It is useless that you are buried in lots of books all day. We should develop some habits and do sports or take part in some activities. Alternate work with rest is a healthy way to study. I usually watched soap opera until midnight before time, which wasted too much time and affected my health and figure. To prevent myself from desiring to watch TV,I took the television out of my room and started to do other things, such as reading and playing the piano.

文化全球化

Cultural Globalization

Globalization creates conditions for widening international exchanges. The cultural difference between countries is disappearing. Cultural globalization develop our own culture and we can get much knowledge from other countries. Kinds of lifestyle make our life colorful. For example, we usually eat hamburgers and beef which from USA.

Although foreign culture will poison our mind. Some foreign films have violence scenes which are bad for children. We should prevent harmful culture from affecting our children. Under the wave of cultural globalization, we should maintain the development of our traditional Chinese culture.

From my perspective, for today’s china, we deserve to give our history a new content and the era value. Only in this way, can our china stride bravely forward under the impact of the globalization.

经济全球化

Economic Globalization

Nowadays we enjoy the same films, fashions, and many other productions. It is because that economic globalization makes products sold anywhere, so it makes our life more convenient,

Recently, economic globalization has brought into public attention. Economic globalization is a double-edged sword. It has its both negative and positive effects. Positive effects are that people can make much money and advanced technology will be introduced to our country. During the process of economic globalization, inequality between developed and developing countries has been increasing and the gap between the rich and the poor has become wider, most of the result of globalization go to assist developed countries.

For these reasons, globalization is a fierce and complicated struggle. We should attach significance to it. So our country should strengthen our own development and progress. Then we will change the challenge into opportunity.

课前演讲：

What will I be？

The life looks like a box of chocolate, you forever can not know what next will be. Although we do not know what will happen in our life, we still have our dream and follow it step by step until we are successful.

For my part, I major in medical science. Therefore, I have the possibility to become a doctor or a scientist. To achieve this dream, I need to study hard and get a good mark. However, what I will be is not only determined by individual, but also is determined by conditions. I feel that medicine is a creative science. Many years ago, when I saw people get hurt and they looked like painful, I attached significance to health and thought maybe I will be a doctor. A famous doctor, that is what I will be.

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郑州枫杨外国语学校小升初英语阅读理解和作文.doc

枫阳2014年3月10日英语考试题

阅读理解A

Miss Green came into the classroom with a piece of paper. There is a big black dot in the middle of the white paper. Miss Green put up this piece of paper and asked, “What can you see, children?” All the children looked at the black dot. “A black dot.” They answered quickly. “But can’t you see this piece of paper?” The black dot is like the unlucky things in our life. If we only see the black dot, how can we be happy?”, Miss Green said. The classroom was very quiet, Miss Green took out another piece of paper. It was a piece of black paper with white dot in the middle.

“What can you see, kids?”, she asked the children, “A White dot.” The children answered loudly. Miss Green smiled. “My children, although we maybe unhappy or worried in our life, it is just like the clouds in the sky. The clouds can leave quickly and the sun can come out soon. You can be a positive child with the sun in your eyes and feel happy all the time.”

( ) 1. What is the relationship between Miss Green and the children?

A. Mother and children B. Teacher and students C. Doctor and patients D. Boss and workers

( ) 2. What does the “black dot ” stand for(代表) ?

A. The lucky things in our life B. The sunshine in our life

C. The unlucky things in our life D. The clouds in our life

( ) 3. What does the word “positive” mean in Chinese?

A. 善良的 B.积极的，乐观的 C.美好的 D.聪明的

( ) 4. Which of the following is TRUE according to the article?

A. Miss Green likes white.

B. If we can only see the black dot, we can be happy.

C. No one likes clouds in the sky.

D. Miss Green wants the kids to be positive in their life

( ) 5. What does this article want to tell us?

A. We should see the white dot on the black paper.

B. Everyone is unlucky sometimes.

C. You should find the hope of life when you are in trouble

D. We should not like clounds.

阅读理解B

Archery has a 10,000-year history, when bows(弓) and arrows(箭) were first used for hunting and war. Archery first appeared (出现) at the Pairs Olympics in 1900.

Badminton was invented by British soldiers(士兵) in India. They called it Poono, the same name as the town in which they lived. It was first played at the Olymics in 1992 at Barcelona (巴赛罗那)

Football is one of the most popular sports in the world. It was first played at the 1908 Olympic Games and it has been played at every Olympics Games, except for LosAngeles 1932

Taekwondo is from Korea. It means “the way of the hand and foot”. They player get points(得分) by hitting each other with these two parts of the body only. The players mustn’t lie on the floor and no equipment(装备) can be used. It first appeared at the 2000 Sydney Olympics.

( ) 6. Who invented the sports of badminton?

A. Indians B. British C. Chinese. D. Korean

( ) 7. Which of these sports appeared earliest at the Olympics?

A. Archery B. Badminton C. Taekwondo D. Football

( ) 8. Which sport was named after a town?

A. Badminton B. Football C. Taekwondo D. Archery

( ) 9. Which of the following picture shows the sports of “Taekwondo”?

A.

B.

C.

D.

( ) 10. Which of the following is NOT TRUE to the passage?

A. Football didn’t appear at the Olympics in 1932

B. Archery appeared 10,000 years ago.

C. All the sports in the chart appeared at the Olympics in the 20th century

D. Players of Tackwondo can only get points by hitting each other with hands or foot.

阅读理解C

What did they invent?

In 1903, Mary Anderson was driving to New York. It was raining _11__ and they had to open the windows of their car and put their heads out to see better. Suddenly Mary hand an idea.

In 1869, Tomas Adams was trying to produce rubber out of the juice. He __12_ to make toys or bicycle tyres(轮胎). The experiment(实验) didn’t work, while he was thinking about this, he took a piece of the rubber he was working with and put it in his mouth.

In 1897, British inventor James Atkinson was looking at the potatoes which they kept in a room under their house. He found that mice had eaten some of the potatoes. So he invented something to stop them.

In 1886, Josephine Cochran was standing in her kitchen. The family lunch was finished. There were a lot of __13__ in front of her and she got very angry, thinking that she had to do this job every day. “If nobody else is going to invent a machine for this, I will do it __14__” she thought.

任务一：把下列词还原到短文中，注意形式变化：

heavy, dish, I, want

11.________ 12.__________ 13.___________ 14.__________

任务二：根据英文释义，从文中找到对应的单词

15._____________ A person who designs or creates new things.

16._____________to make or grow something to be sold

任务三：找出每一段所对应的发明。Paragraph:段落

A. chewing gum(口香糖) B. fridge C. mouse trap D. cooker E. dishwasher F. windscreen wipers.

17. Paragraph 1_____________

18. Paragraph 2_____________

19. Paragraph 3_____________

20. Paragraph 4_____________

作文：

请介绍你的好朋友Tom，内容包括：

1. 学习努力，平时爱看书，有时上网{20172017郑州英语初一作文范文}.{20172017郑州英语初一作文范文}.

2. 身体健康，每周做运动，每天步行去学校

3. 喜欢吃不同种类的水果和蔬菜

字数：50词左右

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郑州托福 2016年1月9日托福作文范例

郑州托福 2016年1月9日托福作文范例 作文题目

Some people think it is the best approach for students to learn if school start the day at a early time in the morning. But someone think the school should start the day at late time. Which one do you prefer? Use specific reasons and detailed examples to support your answer.

Have you experienced struggling with your pillow every morning? Have you ever choked with the traffic jams in the rush hour? Have you ever felt sleepy in the first class? No matter what scientific evidence shows us the advantages of having class early, there is a new research from Mark Fischetti of Scientific America convince us that students' efficiency can be improved by going to school later. I totally agree with the statement for it’s beneficial for both of students and teachers.

First, students' efficiency can be elevated. Under the excessive burden, students always stay up late and that’s why their sleep time has been shrunk. If they are forced to get up early, their whole day will be windy. Thus, students would waste the most substantial content of study, nevertheless, students would be more fresh and have concentrations on the class. According to Kyla Wahlstrom, director of the Center for Applied Research and Educational Improvement at the University of Minnesota. She made a research in Minnesota February that tracked

9000 students in eight public high schools in Minnesota, Colorado and Wyoming. After one semester, when school began at 8:35 a.m. or later, grades earned in math, English, science and social studies typically rose a quarter step—for example, up halfway from B to B+. This conclusion perfectly convinces everyone that students should get up later. Second, we should follow students' biological system. Adolescents' physiology has greatly altered from their childhood because of

melatonin. The later the delay, the greater the payoff. Following their biological change can make them healthy and wealthy. Take me as an example, as a teacher, most of my students would like to finish their homework and chat with friend until the mid night. They can't control their biological clock, which makes they fell very sleepy in the first class. Moreover the rate of being on duty is lower compared with other time periods.

Third, traffic problems can be released. One should know that big cities have the traffic jams all the time, which makes students choked with the road and can’t get rid of it. Moreover, students who live far away from the school are hurry to get catch up with the early classes. If schools

postpone their time to be later, it will help them stagger the rush time of traffic. Nevertheless, students would start their study restlessly, which influences their mood not mention to the study efficiency. A study in 2012 from California public schools shows that students can avoid

transportation problems by changing their class time. What’ more, their literature and math scores are higher on the average.

To conclude, getting up early and attend class are good for both of

students and teachers. I suggest that school should postpone their class time and improve students’ efficiency.

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阅读下面的材料，根据要求写一篇不少于800字的文章。（60分）

有一条在微信圈流传的“稻草定律”说，路边的一根稻草如果没人搭理，它永远只是一根稻草。卖白菜的人用它捆绑了白菜，它的价值就与白菜一样了；卖螃蟹的人拿去捆绑螃蟹，它就与螃蟹的价值一样了。人的价值有时也像一根稻草，与自身无关，就看你与谁在一起。∥但也有人觉得“稻草定律”并非人生宝典，稻草什么时候都是稻草，螃蟹什么时候都是螃蟹。螃蟹的美味是稻草永远不会散发的，稻草不要以攀龙附凤来提升自己的价值；稻草的价值在于它是稻米成长的母本，它孕育的米香也是螃蟹所不具备的。

要求选好角度，确定立意，明确文体，自拟标题；不要脱离材料内容及含意范围作文，不要套作，不得抄袭。 [评分细则]

（一）基础等级评分，“题意”项主要看选择角度是否符合材料内容及含意涉及的范围。选择中心角度和重要角度的属于“符合题意”，与材料内容及含意范围沾边的套作，在第三等及以下评分（“发展等级”不给分）。

（二）发展等级评分，不求全面，可根据“特征”4项16点中若干突出点按等评分。 1.深刻：①透过现象深入本质 ②揭示事物内在的因果关系 ③观点具有启发作用 2.丰富：④材料丰富 ⑤论据充足 ⑥形象丰满 ⑦意境深远

11文句有表现力 3.有文采：⑧用词贴切 ⑨句式灵活 ⑩善于运用修辞手法○

12见解新颖 ○13材料新鲜 ○14构思新巧 ○15推理想象有独到之处○16有个性特征 4.有创意：○

（三）缺标题扣2分；不足字数，每少50个字扣1分；每1个错别字扣1分，重复的不计；标点错误多的，酌情扣分。

（四）套作、文体不明确的适当扣分。抄袭的，“基础等级”在第四等之内评分，“发展等级”不给分。

二测作文评卷，像高考一样采取分项分等打分。

但为了便于操作，采用与分类结合的打分形式，一类卷48分以上，二类卷41-47分，

三类卷31-40分，四类卷21-30分，五类卷20分以下。高考作文平均分43-44分。

内容项，表达项，特征项各占二十分。然后每项的二十分又分为四个等级（五分一个等级：一等20-16分，二等15-11分，三等10-6分，四等5-0分）。

立意参考：

【从综合的角度】

（1）从文中关于稻草价值的不同观点出发，探讨：何为“价值”/人（事物）的价值由什么决定/人（事物）的价值应怎样体现。

（2）从稻草卖了螃蟹价却并不具备螃蟹的价值这一点出发，①论述看问题不能只看表象，而应深入本质（看问题不能看表象）。②联系社会现实（如奢侈品消费、过度包装等）探讨“价格”与“价值”倒置的现象。

【从“有人”角度】

①依附他人可能会抬高自己的身价，却不一定能提升自己的社会价值。 ②人（事物）的价值取决于自我的品质（质量、作用等）。 【从“稻草定律”的角度】

①环境可以影响/决定事物的价值。②联系现实探讨如何增加人（事物）的附加值。

学生只要能从以上角度立意，均“符合题意”，“内容”项可确定为一类或二类。 一类卷（≥48分） 构思好或结构严谨 / 论据充分 / 材料新鲜 / 语言流畅。 二类卷（41-47分） “符合题意”+结构 / 论据 / 材料 / 语言 一般。

三类卷（31-40分） “基本符合题意”或“符合题意”+结构 / 论据 / 材料 / 语言一方面有缺陷。

但有的同学写“多角度看问题”“换个角度看问题”等，易泛化。立意的角度与材料的内涵有一定的出入，说明没有理解材料的内涵，属基本符合题意，内容项在三等打分，其他项的得分视表达等而定，但不能跨类打分。（一般总分在31-40分之间打分，最高不应超过42分）

但要提醒大家，不要仅仅光看题目就判分。有的学生虽然作文题目不醒目，不恰当，但在行文过程中是围绕材料写的。所以要看全文，否则易误判。

[答卷情况]（省实验中学马兰老师供稿）

本次作文试题取材于现实，围绕“稻草定律”发表不同意见，引导学生在纷繁说法中树立自己的观点，与高考近两年作文思辨性增强的命题趋势保持高度一致，明确了作文考查方向。这样的命题既有利于善于独立思考分析的学生脱颖而出，也暴露出目前学生作文中存在问题。

问题一：逻辑链不完整导致偏离题意。

这次作文的命题材料意义明朗，观点清晰，核心概念“价值”在材料中出现五次，材料指向非常明晰——宜围绕“价值”阐发议论。

有的考生由材料中“人的价值有时像一根稻草，与自身无关，就看你与谁捆绑在一起”一句话得出“近朱者赤，近墨者黑”的结论，以此为题作文，立意为“身边的人或事物会影响到你，所以应该接受好的影响，自己也应该给别人以好的影响”，而完全抛弃了核心概念“价值”。

作者构思之初，考虑的也许是“接受好的影响才能提升价值”，但写作时已完全被自己的命题“近朱者赤，近墨者黑”所误导，以致偏离了材料中心意义。其实，这位考生只需再

深入一步，把“近朱者赤，近墨者黑”的想法向“价值”靠拢，用“接受好的影响来提升自己的价值”作为文章立意，这就没有任何问题了。

只想到“因”（原因、条件、方式等）——“要接受好的影响”，而不联系“果”——“提升价值”，逻辑链条不完整导致的偏题现象还有“扬长避短”“坚持自我”“让自信伴我成长”等等。其实，“扬长避短”“坚持自我”“自信”等均可视为“彰显价值”或“提升价值”的途径，如果下笔之前有一个逻辑关系的完整表述，就会避免这种偏题现象。

相反，大部分立意正确的考生在文中呈现的是这样的“逻辑链”： “用努力和奋斗提升自我价值” “找准位置才能发现其价值”

“价值在于对他人对社会产生的积极作用，奉献自己，就是价值的真谛” “坚守自我，不盲目追随以实现自我价值”

“有认清自我的勇气，坚定的信念，百折不挠的意志，才能发挥自我价值” „„

问题二：素材陈旧，不善于联系现实生活。

这则极富现实意义的材料，引导学生把目光投向生活。从生活现象中选择素材，表达观点应该是自然而然的事情。但很多考生似乎已习惯于把自己的生活隔绝在作文以外，而偏偏从古人堆里寻找例证。陶渊明、苏轼、司马迁、李白等高考名人悉数登场，演绎价值的方方面面，如果论述合乎情理合乎逻辑，自然不算什么错误，也并不影响作文得分。但看到如此切合社会现实的题目在众多考生笔下一下子穿越到千年以前，总是有点惋惜和遗憾。是学生对现实生活熟视无睹？还是觉得作文就是作文，与生活毫不相干呢？这一点值得我们思考。

但关注现实，有思想的学生面对如此话题，就特别容易出色发挥。请看《欲高必自立》的开头部分：

“稻草定律”在社交应用中的热传和其传播的价值观受到当今社会的热捧，实在透出当今浮躁投机的风气，人们攀龙附凤，投机取巧，想尽办法提高自己的身价，殊不知此举背后是偏离正轨的人生观。此举的结果，非但不能抬升自己的身价，反而贬低自我人格和扭曲自我修养。

当今人们为什么如此浮躁投机而非潜心提高自我境界呢？因为人们见到不学无术的官二代富二代将父母名望和资产加于己身虚增自己价值不费吹灰之力取得的巨大成功；因为人们见到庸碌无为的势利小人靠须溜拍马轻而易举取得的傲人成就。如此种种，蒙蔽了众人的双眼，使人们忽略了自我价值在成功中所占的重要地位。

所以，要改变低迷消极的风气，必先从重视独特的自我价值开始。 ……

文章直切时弊，开篇即结合生活现象把“稻草定律”受到热捧的根本原因揭示出来，给人以启发和警醒，显示出非同一般的洞察力，为赢得高分奠定了基础。

我们当然不敢奢求我们的学生都具有如此深邃的思想，但不要把目光锁定在故纸堆里，而应放宽眼界，关注生活，尽量从现实生活中选择论据证明观点，这还有待于老师们加以引导。

问题三：议论不知扣合主题。 材料核心为“价值”，那么文中议论均应该围绕“价值”进行，而有些考生命题虽突出了“价值”，但写作时并未真正体现出这一中心。比如《独特的价值》一文，议论中反复说到的只是“关键在于要抓住自己的优点”，而并没有深入一步说到“以此来彰显自我价值”。《做最真实的自己》一文，只说到“做真实的自己才能成功”，也没有与“价值”相联系。

问题四：书写脏乱不清晰。

这是一个老问题，书写模糊，涂改脏乱影响得分是不争的事实。我观察到二测作文打分有这样的情况：档次相当而书写高下不同的文章，其得分差距一般在5—8之间，该打54分降为47，该打48的降为41„„，老师们仍需强调书写的干净清晰对于作文的重要性。 [高分作文]

[作文备考建议]

（1）这两年高考作文命题注重思辨能力的考查，独立思考的能力显得越发重要。老师