2017广东中考作文范文

2017广东中考作文范文篇一

2017年中考作文范文集锦

2017年中考作文范文集锦

一、体育活动篇

体育活动，让我懂得友情

“今天800米计时跑，大家努力啊！”老师大喊着；“哎呦„„又是800米„„”同学们抱怨着；我则感觉晴天霹雳一样，怎么办啊？

这时，好友突然拉了拉我的衣襟，意思是我们一起跑。心中有一种莫名的感动，我冲她笑了笑，心里却很没底，本来就跑不快，别再拖了她的后腿。

“预备，跑！”我瞬间就看见好几个人从我面前飞奔而过。我不由地握紧拳头，也加大步伐，突然听到旁边熟悉的声音在喊：“别着急，慢慢来，调整呼吸！”我点了点头，跟着她的步伐。她在旁边不断地鼓励着我，“加油！加油！”我不愿拖她后腿，使出浑身解数往前迈着沉重的步子。她坚定而有力的步伐，好像在为我鼓掌，为我加油！（行文中的点题句，朋友的鼓励伴我左右）

“一分二十，”跑完了一圈，老师对我们喊着。此时的我脚步变得缓慢，呼吸变得急促，已是筋疲力尽了，想放弃，但真的不愿拖她的后腿。她好像猜透我的心思，过来一把抓住我的手，眼神中无比坚定。（朋友积极的态度给予我无限动力）有这样的朋友陪伴，什么困难不能克服呢？（心理描写）我感受到从心中传来的支持，对她使劲地点了点头，她会意地笑了。世界突然变得好静，静得只有我们俩坚定的脚步声、沉稳的心跳声、急促的喘息声，这美妙的“乐曲”，好像在对我说，加油加油！努力努力！（排比与比喻并用为文章添彩！）

我机械地往前迈着步子，只见她突然伸出双臂指向前方，顺着她的手指望去，原来终点就在前方20米处左右，我明白她想让我冲刺。在她的指引下，我使出浑身解数，全力冲向终点。“咚咚咚咚„„”脚步声再次为我们欢呼，也在为我们的友谊欢呼！（行文中的点题句）

“满分！”听到这个消息，我们相视一笑，击掌欢呼，温暖的阳光照耀着我们，我看不清她的脸，只看到了一张灿烂的笑靥。我们清脆的笑声回荡在空旷的操场，美丽的太阳也在为我们的友谊而欢笑，看，它的笑靥映红了半边天„„（行文中的点题句，通过外物烘托人物的心情）

这一瞬间，我忽然懂得了友情。朋友，不仅仅是一起说笑的玩伴，更是在你最需要帮助的时候，伸出援助之手；在你最落魄的时候，送给你安慰的微笑；在你最伤心时，陪你一起分担„„友谊是这世界上用真心才能够换来的最可贵、最真实的东西。 （抒情议论句点明中心）

“想什么呢？回班了。”好友的话打断了我的思绪，“有你真好”，我自语道。一起漫步在红色的塑胶跑道上，那上面有我们一起奔跑的影子，有我们一同留下的汗水，更有我们共同努力的痕迹，那是我们友情的见证„„（行文自然流畅，紧扣文题！）

点评：这两篇文章同样都是写跑步，但两位同学确立的中心不同，这就是所谓的相同选材表现不同主题。其实考场作文在于灵活变通，我们准备一些实用的写作素材，灵活变通，就可以写出不同主题的文章。例如跑步这件事，虽然极为平常普通，但可以做到一材多用，比如写中考作文《向前，向前，向前！》，《凝聚》都可以用。所以学习贵在活学活用！

体育活动，让我融于集体

初中三年的生活让我受益匪浅。拼搏在学习中，让我开拓思维；竞争，让我调整心态；体育活动，让我融于集体，感受集体的团结和爱。（排比句点题）

仍是四月万物初醒，春风微凉的时节。“快点，跟上”我们班中一行十四个女生在大操场练习跳大绳。刚刚开始，大家的配合还不熟练。“180，181，停！很好，已经有进步了”体委的声音带着微微上扬的音调。大家也都发现我们配合的熟练程度有所提高，长时间练习的劳累瞬间消失了。惊呼声中我看到大家的眼睛映着夕阳格外的美丽雀跃。这个集体正在渐渐融合。（巧妙的点题句，聪明的写法！）

也曾有过伤痛和拼搏。

“啪，啪”绳子抽打着地面，突然我的左腿传来一阵钻心的疼痛。练习完后，我扑通一声躺在了休息的地方。大家马上关切的围过来询问我的状况，让我好好休息。当天晚上去医院检查后确定是骨膜炎，不能跳跃跑动。

但是箭在弦上，不得不发。临时换人是不可能的，所以我决定坚持练习。虽然每一次都疼痛难忍，但是同学们关切的眼神和时而看着我喷过药的部位紧锁的眉头，就会突然一下感到一股决心和安定涌上

来。有这样的集体在背后，我还会犹豫什么呢？（集体给予我力量）

正是体育活动让我体会到了集体的关心和爱，让我敢于拼搏，融于集体。（行文中的点题句） 最重要的是欢笑和收获。

正式比赛当天，紧张之情无以言喻。刚刚获得男篮冠军的男生们也悉数到场助威。伴随着安静地观看和期待的眼神，短短几分钟的比赛在一声清脆的哨声后结束。“271”这个近乎神迹的数字报出的下一瞬间，一阵震耳欲聋的尖叫和呐喊声终于冲破了寂静，直冲云霄。我们兴奋的拥抱、欢呼。所有的训练中的付出，在这一刻收获了最为甜美的回报。这是我们共同努力的成果。我也在为这个成果努力的过程中，真正融入了这个温暖的集体。（成绩的取得，在于每一个人融入集体）

集体的伟大在于它所给予每个人的鼓励、勇气和快乐。而在体育运动中，把我们所有被给予的人融成了一个整体，把每个人牢牢联系在一起。

未来，集体给每个人的感觉是永远不会变的，是可以持续一生的温馨和快乐。（点出集体的意义所在，提升文章的层次）

体育活动，让我学会注意细节

成功是一道难题，题中有一道道难关。为了成功，有些人拼命地挥洒着汗水，却以失败告终，为什么？因为他们都忽略了一些细节。细节决定着成败，这是我从体育活动中感悟到的。

还记得那是一节排球课，看着老师行云流水，轻松自如的样子，我们都觉得很简单，不就是把球向上一抛，再用手臂把球颠起，35个，很容易！

开始练习了，我学着老师的样子，把排球向上抛出，下落中两手并在一起去托排球，第一下很轻松，第二下时，排球划出一道弧线，落在远处。不会吧，我试了一次又一次，连续的次数没超过10个。我有些丧气，抱怨道：“明明做得和老师教的差不多嘛？”“差不多！差就差在这‘差不多’三个字！”一个严肃的声音从背后想起，体育老师生气地说，“一看你就没认真看示范，你那两手握的姿势不对，手臂分开又不与地面平行，脚的动作也不对---”“最重要的就是这些细节，只有细节都标准，才能让结果完美。细节，一定要注意细节！”

这些话让我重新仔细观察起老师的动作：手掌交叠在一起，手臂紧并在一起，举在胸前与地面平行，两脚一前一后地分开，眼睛始终盯着排球，用力均匀，球的高度过头约一米---我一边看边把每一个细节记在心中。又开始练习了，我模仿着老师的动作，尽量做到精细一致，果然，连续击球的次数不断增多，8个，----10个----20个---我都有点不相信自己了，注意细节让我一点点接近成功。

练了一会儿，老师来检查我们的成果了。我牢记着学会的细节要领满怀自信地等着老师的口令。随着“开始”的口令，我深吸一口气，稳稳地把球向上一抛，心中默默重复着那些细节，双手迅速交叠，手臂靠近并与地面平行举于胸前，看准球的落点，两臂力度适当，手腕轻抖，球准确地颠向空中，有节奏地一起一落。

“20”，手臂有点酸麻，脖子也仰得有点僵硬，但心里还是清醒地暗示着自己：动作不能有一点变形，细节决定成败。

“30”，此时的我已不再想那些细节了，因为它们已经完美的转化在我的动作中了。

“35”。一气呵成，心中涌起无限的喜悦和感慨：注重细节，让我获得成功。

成功是一道难题，面对一道道难关，我们除了需要鼓起勇气、付出汗水，还需要注意细节。——这就是体育活动带给我的巨大财富。

点评：由此可见，虽然是一个体育活动的大主题，但每个人的落脚点不同，写出

来的文章就各具特色。高妙佳和朱融慧的文章立意较为独特，在众多篇目中有独特之处。

我们大部分同学的选材和立意没有问题，但很难将文章些细腻，写生动。

希望我们能从以下的写作片段中获得灵感。

二、古诗文大赛篇

别出心裁的立意

予人玫瑰，手有余香

“背完的同学可以走了”，老师的话音未落，教室里已是一片欢腾，只有少数同学还在面对古诗卷眉头紧蹙，面色茫然。我麻利地收拾好书包，哼着无名的小调，连蹦带跳地向门口走去，想象着回家后迅

速写完作业就可以好好欣赏那场球赛了。（对比的手法写出两种人的表现，开篇不俗！）

“你回来”，前脚虽已跨到门外，但师命难违，还是小心翼翼地回到老师跟前。（出人意料的小插曲，如电影快切镜头，如乐曲声调急剧而下！文如看山不喜平！）“他的古诗还没背过，明天就是古诗文背诵大赛了，你得帮帮他。”老师的话像晴天霹雳一样将我击中。（比喻——世事难料的无奈感受！）我用乞求的眼神望着老师，（刻画不情愿的样子）希望能放过我，但显然于事无补，我只好不情愿地扔下书包，向他走去。

教室里只剩下几个人，都结成了两人小组在一起背诵，显然还有几个跟我同病相连的人。想到这里，心中的不平衡少了几分。

我坐到他身边，一把抓过他的古诗卷子，大义凛然地说道：“来，咱们一起背。”“太感谢你了！”他的喜悦溢于言表，像是久困于沙漠的人，发现了希望的绿洲。（比喻——他的喜悦溢于言表！）

“飞来山上千寻塔，闻说„„闻说„„”他紧锁着眉头，犹豫不决地背诵着， “闻说鸡鸣见日升。”我手中不断扇动着卷子，不耐烦的说道，“哦，闻说鸡鸣见日升，不畏„„不畏„„” 他苦恼地抓了抓脑袋，“不畏浮云遮望眼，只缘身在最高层！背了这么久，怎么还没记下来啊？”我失去了耐心，一把把卷子拍到桌子上，高声对他喊道，他疑惑地望着我“呃„„不应该是‘自缘身在’么？”他小声咕哝着。“嗯？”我连忙翻开卷子，‘自缘身在最高层’ 这几个字映入眼帘。（语言描写生动形象，极具画面感！）我惊诧的张大了嘴，翻来覆去的读了好几遍，猛地站起身，拿着卷子向老师走去。“没错，是‘自缘身在最高层’”得到老师的肯定后，我难以置信的睁大了眼睛，我背错了！（行文如峰回路转）

我混混沌沌地回到座位上，“看！是我对了吧。”点点头，看着他那憨厚的笑脸，刹那间，之前的不耐烦一扫而空。是他，让我及时改正自己的错误，悬崖勒马，避免了在大赛中给班里扣分，如果真到那时，可就后悔莫及了。我拍了拍他的肩，“咱们赶快开始背吧！还有„„”谢谢，心中默默的说道。（好一个心中默默的说道！）此刻的我，不再有抱怨，不再有烦躁，只是静下心来，一起背诵着唐诗宋词，一起品味着诗赋的韵律。（浮躁退去，助人之时，最受益的恰恰是我们自己！）

夕阳的余晖掠过我们认真的双眸，昏暗的夜幕笼罩我们窗边的美景，明亮的灯光照亮我们吟咏的篇章。空荡荡的教室里，仅剩我们两个，但那洪亮的背诵声却响彻云霄。我为找到自己的漏洞欣喜若狂，我为他背下一首诗而欢呼雀跃，时间，就这样，在我们的共同的欢乐下缓缓流过„„（共同奋斗的欢乐时光！与人玫瑰，手有余香！）

我不后悔错过了球赛，更不后悔帮助了他，是他，让我明白了在传授知识的同时，会使你找到平时知识的漏洞，避免与成功失之交臂。其实，最终的受益人，还是自己啊！予人玫瑰,手有余香。（结尾扣题，点名中心！）

写同学之间互助的，一般分为两种，自己帮助了别人，或别人帮助了自己！作者匠心独具，写自己被老师安排去帮助同学背诗，结果自己也被别人帮助了，这传达了一种多么自然而积极的主题啊！生活就是这样，付出总会有不经意的所得！

独具匠心的结构

在古诗文大赛中成长

磨砺给了雄鹰一双最有力的翅膀，任它在天空翱翔；挑战锻造了我坚强的意志，令我在困境中成长。

——题记

夜凉如水，漆黑如墨。 一扇窗下，橙色的光芒透过纱窗，温暖而柔和，时而能听到窗里面传出的细微的读书声„„

此刻，我就坐在这窗前，伴着这抹橙色的灯光，手里捧着那些熟悉得如同老朋友一样的卷子，背诵着烂熟于胸的古文。无法抑制的困意一波接一波地袭来，似乎只要一闭上眼睛，立刻就能进入香甜的梦境。蓦然惊醒，我用力揉了揉自己的眼睛和太阳穴，竭力将睡意驱逐。大脑再次清醒，我又娓娓背来，企图能够清晰地记忆住所有的古诗文内容。明天就是年级古文背诵大赛了，万一抽签到我，我可不能因为背诵不出来而给班级丢脸啊。

坚持！再背最后一遍!我最后一次鼓励自己！

雏鹰正在为明天的翱翔练习展翅，期待明天直冲云霄！

天空如镜，清澈如洗。温暖的阳光照在我苍白的脸上，却没有为我镀上一层健康的气色。

我带着晕沉沉的脑袋去了学校。刚开始上课就感觉自己头晕目眩，肚子阵阵发痛，这趋势愈演愈烈，

我很难用毅力去控制痛楚的蔓延。无奈我只好向老师和妈妈发出求救信号„„

检查、开药、服药„„当一系列事情过后，我从医院又回到了学校。面对同学诧异而关怀的眼神，我不由苦笑，唉，若不是古文背诵大赛即将开始，若不是不想让以前的努力化为乌有，我真想回到自己舒适而温暖的床上睡个天昏地暗。但是一个月来坚持练习，磨枪擦剑的士兵怎么能临阵逃脱呢？怎么能放弃一次为班级争光的机会呢？放弃，不是我的风格。坚持，才是我的选择！

雏鹰逐渐成长为雄鹰，正在为冲上云霄做足充分的准备，准备有朝一日能展翅翱翔于蓝天下。

舞台空旷，灯光绚烂。在橘黄色的灯光下，礼堂的前方传来清晰的声音：“ⅹ班，ⅹ号!”我早已有了这种预感,果然，我成为代表班级参加古诗文背诵的一员，站在硕大的舞台中央接受检查。看着眼前黑压压的全年级同学，我竟变得不知所措，脑海一片空白。

不，不能在这里退缩！

突然灵光乍现，回想起平日里自己的刻苦，回想起昨晚我挑灯夜战的情景，我告诉自己：“坚持住，调整好心态！”终于，熟悉的不能再熟悉的古诗如同行云流水般在心中缓缓流落，“醉里挑灯看剑„„可怜白发生！”，当我背诵出我最喜欢的那首诗句后，台下掌声如雷，我才意识到：原来我已经顺利地背诵完毕了。我赢了，这些天的坚持练习，最终换来了赢的喜悦。当时感觉自己就像那只雄鹰，在以舞台为背景的天空中翱翔，冲破灯光组成的云彩直抵胜利的彼岸。

雄鹰终于展翅翱翔，冲向云霄,俯瞰世界！

我在这次大赛中，得到磨练，得到成长。成功只会眷顾那些执着坚持的人，只要我们学会坚持，我们就会一步一步在曲折地成长中走向成功的彼岸。

点评：一唱三叹的情感波澜，瞻前顾后的布局，行文中工整的结构，真可谓匠心独具！

行云流水的点题句

团结就是力量

“哦耶！我们是第一啊！”随着一抹白影窜进前门，教室里瞬间被狂喜点燃。大家开心地抱成一团，每个人脸上都开出了美丽的花：默写比赛，我们霸气地高居榜首！（欢庆的场面是因为什么事呢？开篇激发读者的阅读兴趣！）

还记得几个星期前，当张老师告诉我们要抽学号默写时大家都是一声哀叹：“天呐，这么恐怖！” “怎么能说恐怖呢？”张老师义正词严，“这样既可以为你们中考打基础，又可以训练你们的集体意识。”她环视全班，接着说，“因为我们要做一个班级之间的评比，所以大家都要打起精神好好背，团结起来为集体争光！”（行文中的点题句！）

于是大家便开始了拼死背书，毕竟谁也不想拖集体的后腿呀。老师说得对，团结就是力量！（行文中的点题句！）

“小西！过来帮帮我，我这篇怎么也背不下来！”被抽到默写的我满头大汗，跌跌撞撞地跑去寻求帮助。小西听到喊声，立即停下笔，把自己的作业推到一边，三两下收拾了桌子，给我让出地方：“快点，我来帮你背！你看这个岳阳楼啊，它„„”

小西教得很认真，什么字易错，什么句子易落下都一一倾囊而授。我也近似于强迫地让自己的脑子变清醒，一点一点记着那篇总是跟我作对的《岳阳楼记》。

“哎呀，哎呀，我又背串了！”复习了两遍，我又一次出了错误。揉着胀痛的前额，我急得快哭了。“没事，没事，还有时间。”小西安慰我。可是看得出，她也很紧张，握着笔杆的指骨都因太过用力而泛白了。

“来，喝点水，清醒一下！”小董从旁边递过水杯，暖暖地笑着，“加油！这可是为了咱班啊，你要替我们这些没被抽到的人努力啊！大家都站在你的左右！别怕！”（行文中的点题句！）

“对！”小贝也走过来重重地点着头，“加油！团结就是力量！团结就是胜利！我们陪你一起背！”她笑着拍拍我，然后做了个加油的手势。（行文中的点题句！）

“嗯！”我深吸一口气。我一定行的！因为团结就是力量！你们在我左右！（行文中的点题句！） 吞下一口水，我抹抹嘴，捋起袖子，坚定地看着小西：“来！这一次，我一定背下它！”

一遍，两遍，三遍„„终于，在小西、小董、小贝的帮助下，我背了下来！紧绷的神经和躯体一下子软了下来，我开心极了。因为有你们的帮助，因为我们是个团结的集体，我笑迎默写！（行文中的点题句！）

走进默写的教室，我放松神经，回想了一遍又一遍提前的准备，胸有成竹。我不会害怕，因为有你们的帮助，因为我们很团结，都在为集体的光荣一起奋斗！（行文中的点题句！）

题目下来了：《岳阳楼记》！我激动地手抖，真是太好了！看着吧！我不会让你们白白付出！（天道酬勤！）

成绩，看似理所当然地满分，我和小西抱在一起。

“谢谢你！小西！”

小西打了我一下：“谢什么？应该的！这才不是你一个人的战斗呢！我们是团结的一家人！要记住啊，团结就是力量！”（行文中的点题句！）

现在，听到我们班整体成绩第一的好消息，全班同学都开心地蹦跳着，笑着，享受着这个团结的集体结出的的荣誉果实。（行文中的点题句！）

“看吧，团结就是力量！”小西神秘地笑着，过来撞了我一下。（行文中的点题句！）

沐浴在快乐的气氛中，我回以一个大大的笑脸。我想，我知道了。（韵味无尽，耐人品味！）

生动传神的人物刻画

微 笑

“请各班第二十号同学做好准备。”古诗文背诵大赛的舞台上，男主持的声音渐渐冰冻了礼堂上方的空气。

什么？二十号？我怎么这么“幸运”啊？这句话如晴天霹雳般击中了我，一股寒气从脚后跟直冲脑神经。我手心冒着冷汗，顿觉一片哀乐共鸣，同学们以送刑场的目光望向我。

我以小蜗牛爬井的速度走向礼堂后场，一路踉踉跄跄。一阵无助感悄然爬上心头，仿佛前些天的背诵成果一并付诸东流。

后场上，主持人和参赛选手的声音隐约可闻。我脑中一片空白。

这时，一个甜美而轻快的声音在耳畔响起：“我们一起复习怎么样？”我受宠若惊，抬眼寻觅这悦音的主人，只见一位袅袅婷婷的邻班女生，娴静而温婉。她的嘴角藏着一丝若有若无的笑意，清秀的眉眼间跳跃着灵动的神采，牵动我的心随之飞舞。太棒了！我正愁如何复习呢。

看到我默许后，她面带笑靥，用百灵鸟般清脆的嗓音正色道：“我先问你咯。‘春和景明’的下一句是什么？”“波澜不惊。”我的声音带着微微的颤抖。

她似乎察觉到了什么，便转而安慰我：“别紧张，不就一次比赛吗，我帮你复习还有什么可怕的？”俏皮的语言令我忍俊不禁。我点点头。她明亮的眸子里闪过一丝欣慰，嘴角扬起漂亮的弧度，满脸温婉可人的笑容，接着提问：“那„„‘气象万千’的前一句是什么？”正中我的软肋，我最怕提问前一句，一时乱了阵脚，绞尽脑汁却还是无果。

看到我蹙眉，她恬静的笑了。“诺，是‘朝晖夕阴’。记住啦。”哦，对，是“朝晖夕阴”，可真多亏了她帮我复习啊！她见我豁然开朗的神情，不禁“扑哧”的笑了，很有成就感的样子，又继续了提问„„

那些背诵的记忆渐渐飞回我的脑海。不觉间，时间游走了大半，，我们终于进场了。

轮到我时，她向我笑笑，好像在说：“你能行，别紧张，加油。”那笑容好似一冬日的一缕暖阳，驱走我心里最后一丝焦虑。我深吸了一口气，向舞台走去。那段路，似乎很短却又很长，短到几步之遥，长到我用了好几天的时间来走。

站在台上，全场的目光倾注到我身上，只听男主持轻轻地问：“请说出‘气象万千’的前一句。”“朝晖夕阴”一字一句，铿锵有力，掷地有声。随之而来的是全场如潮水般涌动的掌声。

我成功了。再望向她，依旧是那样甜美清温的笑，告诉我：“我就知道你能行。”

其实，我们原先并不认识，是这次古诗文背诵大赛把我们牵到一起，相识相知。帮助，之于一个人可以助他一臂之力，将他推向成功的彼岸；微笑，之于一个人可以使他重拾希望，温暖其一生；而友谊，之于一个人可以给予他的心灵以慰藉，最终浇灌出最美最艳的花朵。

下台后，她打趣地向我邀功：“想想怎么感谢我吧。哈哈。”说罢，莞尔一笑。在灯光的映衬下，她灿烂的笑如春花„„

2017广东中考作文范文篇二

广东省2017年中考作文不得不说的失分陷阱

广东省2017年中考作文不得不说的失分陷阱

失分陷阱一 书写与卷面

(一)乱涂乱改

现在是电脑阅卷，字迹模糊、扫描不清就会丢失信息，老师看得吃力无疑会影响分数。书写工整、卷面整洁的作文使人赏心悦目，印象分立即增加；字迹潦草、涂改得难以辨认的作文，无形中会被多扣分。

(二)错别字、标点错误

由于考生平时字词基础不过关，或者有“提笔忘字”的现象，导致在考场写作文时常写错别字。广东中考“作文评分标准”中明确指出：文中接二连三出现错别字，自然会被扣分。还有的考生平时不注意标点符号的使用，全篇均使用逗号或者句号，让阅卷老师无法句读，或者存在明显的标点符号使用错误，这些都会被扣分。广东中考“作文评分标准”

(三)字数

广东中考“作文评分标准”字数是硬伤，考生一定要想方设法让自己的作文字数达到要求。

失分陷阱二 标题

(一)忘写标题

广东中考“作文评分标准”即使你的作文再好，忘写标题，就会被扣2分。

(二)审题——若即若离

近年来，广东中考作文多以“半命题”形式出现，大多都有导语，

考生要在所给题目、导语范围内进行审题与写作，不可抛开话题、另辟蹊径地“信马由缰”。否则，就会不着边际，偏离话题。

(三)入题——开门不见山

中考作文因字数、时间的限制，不可能写得太多，理应开门见山，开宗明义，亮明观点，特别是考场作文，开门见山地向阅卷老师展现作文的主旨大意，对于取得好的成绩来说十分重要。但有相当多的考生往往出现“入题慢”的弊病，引用原材料或可有可无的内容占很大篇幅。

(四)扣题——蜻蜓点水

写作文从头到尾没有出现与题目关键词相近的表述，扣题不紧，看不出是就所给的特定题目而写的文章。

失分陷阱三 立意

(一)以偏概全

由于忽略对给定题目的整体解读，匆忙在脑海中搜索事例或者名人名言，导致确立的观点或者选择的材料不能完全符合命题意图。

(二)刻意拔高

在立意时强行超越自己的认知水平，刻意提升理论高度，导致假话、空话、套话以及废话连篇累牍。

(三)面面俱到{2017广东中考作文范文}.

对导引材料的关键词、提示语不做分析和选择，无一遗漏地组织进去。想要面面俱到，反而面面俱失。{2017广东中考作文范文}.

失分陷阱四 选材

(一)盲目堆砌

选用的素材并不是自己确实了解的，仅凭模糊的记忆随意拼装组合甚至胡编乱造，往往在选材真实性上出现错误，用错误的论据来证

明论点。或者材料陈旧苍白，缺乏厚重感。要么记叙一件事，有骨架没血肉；要么议论一个道理，观点＋例子＋结论，缺分析少论证；要么连例子都没有，翻来覆去，空谈漫议，写到哪儿算哪儿，目的就是为了凑够字数。

(二)绑架古人作虚假证人证言

无论什么题目、什么观点，一旦构思写作，就直接“穿越”到古代，这样不仅有违“联系实际”的写作要求，有违论据典型性的原则，而且大多无法支撑观点，即无法证明观点。

失分陷阱五 结构

(一)虎头蛇尾

由于没有分配好答题时间，以致在写作文时来不及写完，结尾用一句话硬断，或点上一串省略号，亦或干脆空在那儿。无论哪一种情况，都会被视为未完篇，虎头蛇尾的文章是要被扣分的。

(二)层次模糊

写记叙文应遵从“开端—发展—高潮—结尾”的思路。写议论文应按照“提出问题—分析问题—解决问题”或“是什么—为什么—怎么做”的一般性逻辑来增加层次感与梯次性，将思想内容有逻辑层次地进行深度表达，有力地证明观点。切忌通篇都是叙述，看起来全为铺陈而没有发展节点，如流水账一般。

失分陷阱六 语言

(一)堆砌浮华

堆砌辞藻或是片面追求修辞方法的丰富，不能为文章中心服务，对提高作文分数起不到多大作用。

(二)艰涩难懂

有的考生喜欢使用缩写、英文单词、网络语言，其实这是要冒一

定风险的。有些阅卷教师对这类语言很反感，这对考生就有害无利。因此，考生应当使用优美、有内涵的语言来表情达意，使用最规范、最传统的语言来写作，最好不用或少用网络语言。

2017广东中考作文范文篇三

广东省2017年中考作文5大招成就满分作文之四

广东省2017年中考作文5大招成就满分作文之四

第4招 讲究文采

所谓文采，是指语言富有表现力，能给人以美感。无论是优美隽永、汪洋恣肆，还是清新淡雅、凝练质朴，都是有文采的表现。讲究文采，是在语句通顺、规范准确、连贯得体等一般要求的基础上，对作文语言提出的更高要求。

有文采的语言可以给作文增添光彩。但也不要片面追求华丽文风，以至华而不实，因言害意。中学生的作文还是要以朴实自然、生动清新为宜。

♦写作策划

策划方案一：巧用修辞，扮靓语言

策划策略：巧妙运用修辞，对于增强文采有重要作用，常见修辞：比喻、拟人、排比、对偶、夸张等。写作中要有意识地运用修辞手法，来增强语言的感染力。

策划方案二 变换句式，语言错落

策划策略：作文时，如果能灵活多变地运用多种句式，如整句和散句相结合，长句和短句相结合，排比句、设问句、反问句、对称句等句式交替使用，一定会使文章错落多姿，语言活泼流畅。{2017广东中考作文范文}.

策划方案三 锤炼词句，传神表达

策划策略：记叙的情感表达，很大程度上需要用心推敲词句。可准确地运用动词、形容词、叠词来描写人物的神态、动作和声音等；也可通过生动形象的用词和个性化、幽默的语言使整句或整段话闪闪发亮。

策划方案四 引用、化用诗句、名言警句等，增强文化底蕴

策划策略：将一些经典古诗词、警句、熟语等，巧妙地运用到作文中，能为文章增色不少。最常见的引用方式，就是在文章的标题、题记、首段和尾段等局部位置引用古典诗文名句，结合文章内容引发读者关注，激发阅读兴趣。

2017广东中考作文范文篇四

广东专用-2017高考英语作文范文背诵

2017高考英语作文范文背诵

一、如何提建议—— 给交友有困难的同学提建议

I am sorry you are having trouble in making friends.

【引出建议】Here are some tips to help you.

【列举建议】First, why not go and talk to people standing on their own. I agree this is difficult but that person may be lonely too. If you do this, I am sure you will soon have a new friend. Second, you can begin the conversation by asking about their likes and dislikes,【理由】which will make you find people with the same interests. Finally, you should try to join in a discussion, 【理由】letting people know how friendly you are. I hope you will find these ideas useful.

二、列举个例 —— 良好饮食习惯

As we all know, we are what we eat. Therefore, it’s important for us to form healthy eating habits. However, some students have formed a variety of bad eating habits, such as not having breakfast, loving eating snacks, being particular about food, eating and drinking too much and so on, which will surely do harm to their health. To keep healthy, we should have healthy diets. Not only should we have various foods, like fish, meat, vegetables, fruits as well as rice, noodles, but also we should have the foods regularly and properly. Personally, I think it is important to keep a healthy diet, which contributes to building up a strong body. Only in this way can we have enough energy to study better.

三、举例说明 —— 和谐师生关系对你的影响

【要证明的观点】Actually, having a good relationship with teachers makes it easier for us to get along smoothly with our study at school. 【引出例子】Take me for example. 【例子】My teacher is my good friend. When I fail in the exam, it is my teacher that first helps m to analyze the problem. She is patient enough to make me get over all the difficulties in my study. When I am unhappy she always listens to me carefully and then gives me some reasonable suggestions, so that I can focus on my study soon. Also, I have learned to be helpful and considerate.

【重申主题】But for（要不是） the good relationship with my teachers, I could not have made such progress. 套语背诵

1.There is no denying that confidence plays an important role in our life.

A convincing example that jumps into my mind is about speaking English.

2.Such example can be seen easily in our daily life. A good case in point is …

这样的例子在生活中很容易见到，一个很好的例子就是……

四、讨论或辩论 —— 禁止乞丐在地下人行道行气留宿

【引出主题】Recently, Guangzhou has passed a law to ban beggars from begging and sleeping in the subways and our class had a discussion about it last Monday.{2017广东中考作文范文}.

【反对及其理由】56% of the students don’t agree with the idea because they think some beggars really have difficulty in making a living and have to play music in the subway to survive.

【赞成及其理由】However, 44% of the students favour the idea because they think beggars bring a lot of trouble for the city. What’s more, some beggars are just taking advantage of people’s compassion to make easy money.

【个人看法】Personally, I think it is a good idea to forbid beggars in public places and we should take some measures to help them.

五、利弊对比 —— 网购的利弊

【点明主题】Nowadays many people prefer to shop on line. 【罗列益处】

Generally, its advantages can be seen as follows. First, it’s convenient for us to shop on line. Secondly, it helps save much time, with which we can do more other important things. 【罗列弊端】But just as the saying goes, every coin has two sides. Its negative aspects are also apparent. One of the disadvantages is that we are not sure whether the goods we buy are in good quality. 【你的观点】Through the above analysis, I believe that positive aspects of shopping on line for outweigh negative ones. Therefore, I would like to shop on line.

六、采访类 —— 中学生英语单词拼写的问题

Last Wednesday, I had an interview with Mr Wang, an English teacher, concerning the issue of English word spelling among middle school students. According to Mr Wang, slightly more than half of the senior middle school students’ English handwriting is very poor and about 45% of them can not spell words correctly although they are able to speak. He also pointed out that the causes for spelling problems are that there are no specific word spelling checks in exams, and there is not enough training. Worse still, the students are lazy to memorize word spelling. He suggested that we should raise the awareness and place great emphasis on that, and above all, we should master skills while we are training ourselves.

七、调查类—— 21世纪最令人担忧的问题

Last week, we made/did a survey among 500 Senior Two students about the most worrying problems in the 21st century. The survey shows that 32% of the students think that they worry about the natural disasters（自然灾害）most, for earthquakes and floods have taken many people’s lives. Besides, 29% of the students hold the opinion that environmental pollution（环境污染）is the most worrying problem while 17% of the students consider the housing problem（住房问题）to be the most worrying one. The percentage of the students who worry most about employment（就业问题） is the same as that of the students who worry most about food safety（食品安全）. As for myself, food safety is the most worrying problem because it is linked closely to our health.

八、心得体会 —— 诚实/ 勿以善小而不为

1. After reading the story, I am so touched by Alan, whose behavior is worth praising. There is no doubt that honesty still plays a very important role in people’s life and only those who are honest will be trusted and respected by people. （诚实）

3.After reading the story, I was lost in thought. I came to realize that people should never ignore the deed of small kindness. Your small good deeds sometimes will get big returns or make a great difference! （勿以善小而不为）

九、记叙事件经过或过程 —— 日记或游记

【总述】Today we visited Qinghua University.

【过程】 Early in the morning we arrived at the gate of Qinghua University, where we were warmly welcomed by an old professor, who then showed us around the campus. In the library, we saw some university students reading attentively in the reading rooms. After that, we came to the lab building. At the end of the visit, the old professor gave us a lecture on science in the afternoon, which interested us very much. Time passed so quickly that before we knew it, it was time that we had to say goodbye to the professor.

【结果】Since then, I have worked harder at my lessons than usual and made up my mind to be a student of Qinghua University.

十、人物简介 ——用英语简介李敏同学

【姓名职务与特点】 Li Min, monitor of Class 1 Grade 2 (同位语), is healthy and lively. 【成绩与爱好】 She does well in all her subjects, and she is fond of sports, singing and dancing. 【事迹】 When she came to school, she had much difficulty with English, but through hard work she made great progress. In 2006 she took part in the National Physics Olympic Competition and won the first prize. Li Min is very strict with herself in her work and daily life, and is always ready to help others.

相关短语：

1. be admitted into a key university 考上重点大学

2. major in law主修法律

3. get a master’s degree 获得硕士学位

4. graduate from Harvard University 毕业于哈佛大学

5. win the first prize 获得一等奖

6. win a gold medal 赢得一枚金牌

7. become a world champion 成为世界冠军

8. set a good example to us 给我们树立了良好的榜样

9. be highly thought of 受到好评

10．be awarded a medal for 因……而获得奖章

11．be awarded the title of 获得…称号

12．devote ...to ... 把…专用于/奉献给

13. born of a poor clerk ’s family 出生在一个贫困的小职员家庭中

十一、假设处境 —— 假如你当时在场，你会怎样做？

If I had been on the spot, I would have jumped into the river to rescue the child on the condition that I could swim. If not, I would have first called the police and then persuaded the people on the boat and the swimmers nearby to help. (湖北大学生为救溺水小孩死三人事件)

十二、说明异同 —— 古典音乐与流行音乐的异同

【同】From the point of many people, there are many similarities between classical music and pop music. Both of them can make people relax and enjoy life as well. 【异】 However, the differences are also obvious. Classical music can remind them of the sweet memories in the past. Besides, classical music, which was made by the famous musicians like Beethoven is in high class and can last long, while the words of pop music are often concerned with modern life, even true love between friends or lovers. What’s more, pop music is easy to sing. 十三、图表作文

1. 【总述现象】 From the chart, we can see clearly that there has been a sharp rise in the average income of Chinese farmers in the past 30 years. （从上表可以清楚地看出, 在最近30年里中国农民的人均收入急剧上升。）

2.【数据变化】 As early as 1978, the average income of Chinese farmers was only 193 yuan . Then only 16 years later, it increased to 2181.52 yuan. And by 2010, the average income of Chinese farmers had reached 7890 yuan, which was 40 times as much as 30 years ago.

3.【解释原因】There are many reasons accounting for this change. Firstly ... Secondly ... Finally ...

有许多原因可以解释这种变化。第一……第二……最后……

4. 【阐述观点】 As far as I’m concerned, I firmly support the policy of reform and opening up, which is the exact way to make China powerful.

（就我来说, 我坚决支持改革开放政策, 改革开放是强国之路。）

十四、地点简介 —— 介绍广州

Guangzhou, the third largest city in China, also known as Five-lamb City, Flower City and so on, serves as the capital city of Guangdong Province. This city covers a total area of 7, 434 square kilometers with a population of more than ten million. Guangzhou, a famous city with a history of more than 2, 200 years, is a starting port of the Silk Road on the sea in history. With the Pearl River winding its way through the city, Guangzhou enjoys a warm and wet climate. The beautiful city, well-known for its beautiful scenery, is also abundant in traveling resources. 十五、邀请信 —— 邀请外籍老师参加学校新年晚会

Dear Mr. Green,

On behalf of the Students’ Union, I’m writing this letter to invite you to participate in our New Year Evening. The party is going to be held in the school meeting hall from 7:00 p.m. to 9:00 p.m. next Friday. Many wonderful performances, presented by the teachers and students in our school, will be shown on the stage, such as the

Chinese folk songs and dances, Chinese musical instruments, short plays of traditional style and so on. So it will surely offer you a good opportunity to obtain a clearer picture of Chinese traditional culture. We should be very delighted if you could come; meanwhile, our evening would be more cheerful if you could give a performance. We are looking forward eagerly to your participation.

Yours,

Li Ming

十六、节日简介 ——介绍端午节

[时间] The Dragon Boat Festival, a traditional Chinese festival, is celebrated on the fifth day of the fifth month according to the Chinese calendar. It dates from over 2000 years ago, which falls on June 6th this year. [方式] On this day, Chinese people prepare Zongzi — glutinous(粘黏的) rice dumplings wrapped in bamboo leaves. As the festival name shows, people have dragon boat races to celebrate it, especially in the southern places where there are many rivers and lakes. [意义] The Dragon Boat Festival is in memory of Qu Yuan, a great poet of ancient China.

十七、兴趣爱好 —— 我最喜欢的运动是游泳

My favorite sport is swimming. 【喜欢的程度】I first became interested in swimming when I was eight in primary school. Now I am a member of my school swimming team and I keep on swimming every day in the river near my home even in winter. 【喜欢的原因】I like swimming because it can not only help me build up my body, but also enrich my life. 【最喜欢的运动员】In this sport, although I like Liu Yu, I admire Michael Phelps, who is one of the best athletes in the world and got 8 gold medals in Beijing Olympics. 【愿望】How I wish to be an Olympic champion some day!

十八、通知 —— 举办“中学生才艺大赛”的通知

Notice

A “High School Students Talent Show” will be held in Guangzhou Television Station on May 1. There will be eight kinds of talents, including speeches, songs, dances, and musical instruments playing etc. One 1st prize, three 2nd prizes and five 3rd prizes for each type of talent will be offered at the show. If you’d like to have a try, please go to the TV station to sign up before April 30. It’s a good chance for you to show your special talent.

The Students Union

十九、分析原因 —— 分析极端天气出现的原因

[指出现象与引出原因] Reasons for extreme temperatures are varied. [分析原因] For one thing, human’s activities like burning fossil fuels produce carbon dioxide, which make the globe warmer, causing the global temperature to go up. For another, people’ s cutting down trees that can absorb large quantities of carbon dioxide for furniture also contributes to the warming of the earth, which gives rise to extreme temperatures.

二十、问题解决 —— 建设绿色校园

In order to build a green campus, we need to take the following steps. (学校) On the one hand, the school should make rules and regulations to prevent students doing something harm to our green campus.(学生) On the other hand, students should take some classes to raise their awareness. I don’t doubt that our campus will be more beautiful if we work together.

二十一、说明重要性 —— 责任心的重要性

[提出观点] Responsibility is essential to us. [论证] (正面)It not only represents one’s noble quality, but also enables one to be steady-going. Being responsible, you will gain many precious things, such as true love. (反面) Without responsibility, however, you will be an annoyance and can’t do anything successfully. What’s worse，people will lose belief in you if you are irresponsible. [总结] In short, only when we are responsible will we be respected and loved by others.

二十二、发表看法 —— 假期外出旅游

Nowadays, more and more people are in favor of travelling during vacation. [表明观点] To be frank, I can’t agree more with it. [说明理由] There are several factors contributing to my point. In the first place, journeys can widen

our knowledge of geography, customs, cultures and lifestyles of different places and countries and enrich our experiences. In the second place, it is a good way to relax ourselves in my opinion. Furthermore, we can develop better relationship with our friends or family. [得出结论] Therefore, it goes without saying that we can benefit a lot from travelling.

二十三、观点对比 —— 说说人们对幸福的理解

[引出不同观点] Opinions are divided on the feeling of happiness. [观点一] Some people believe that if they have much money or many things, they will be happy. With great wealth, they will be able to do everything they want, with which they will be happy. [观点二] On the other hand, some people regard their intelligence, or their health as their great happiness. [观点三] Still others maintain that happiness is closely tied to their family, for they believe that they feel happy when all members of their family are happy and healthy.

二十四、经历感受 —— 拔苗助长

The story reminds me of a similar experience of my friend. He was once badly ill and went to see the doctor. The doctor gave him some pills, telling him to take them three times a day. However, he failed to follow the doctor’s advice and took them 6 times a day. To his great surprise, he became worse. Just as the old saying goes, “more haste less speed”. No matter what we do, we should obey the law of nature. It is the same with our studies. Only by learning step by step can we achieve something.

二十五、概况记叙文的内容要点

The author tells a story about (某人)a Chinese student with an excellent academic achievement who (做某事) couldn’t find a job in Germany (原因) because of his stealing rides at the subway, (启示)which shows honesty is the best policy.

二十六、概况说明文的内容要点

A survey made in Australia shows (现象) that many teenagers lack one hour’s sleep (原因) due to organized activities and homework, (结果)which results in such serious problems as slow progress in study, weight problem, depression, illness and so on.

二十七、概况议论文的内容要点

The passage tries to tell us (论点) that getting up early in the morning (论据) will benefit us a lot， including a better memory, healthier body and better preparation for the day.

常见英语谚语50句

【勇气篇】

1. No cross, no crown. 不经历风雨，怎么见彩虹？

2. Life is not all roses. 人生并不是康庄大道。

3. All things are difficult before they are easy. 凡事总是由难而易。

4. Failure is the mother of success. 失败是成功之母。

5. Let bygones be bygones. 过去的就让它过去吧。

6. Never too old to learn, never too late to turn. 亡羊补牢，为时未晚。